16.1 Document for Analysis: Tracyâ€™s Poor Interview Follow-Up Letter (Obj. 4)
Your Task. Study the following poorly written letter. In teams or in class discussion, list at least five specific weaknesses. It has problems with punctuation, wordiness, proofreading, capitalization, sentence structure, and other writing techniques you have studied. You may (a) use standard proofreading marks (see Appendix D) to correct the errors or (b) download the document from www.cengagebrain.com and revise at your computer.
3249 West Olive Avenue
Glendale, AZ 85302
June 17, 2015
Mr. Michael Searle
3021 East Van Buren Street
Phoenix, AZ 85022
Dear Mr. Searle:
It was extremely enjoyable to talk with you on tuesday about the Assistant Account Manager position at the Mariposa Agency. The position as you presented it seems to be a excelent match for my training and skills. The creative approach to Account Management that you described, confirmed my desire to work in a imaginative firm such as the Maraposa Agency.
In addition to an enthusiastic attitude I would bring to the position strong communication skills, and the ability to encourage others to work cooperatively within the department. My Graphic Arts training and experience will help me work with staff artists, and provide me with a understanding of the visual aspects of you work.
I certainly understand your departments need for strong support in the administrative area. My attention to detail and my organizational skills will help to free you to deal with more pressing issues in the management area. Despite the fact that it was on my rÃ©sumÃ© I neglected to emphasize during our interview that I had worked for 2 summers as a temporary office worker. This experience helped me to develop administrative support and clerical skills as well as to understand the every day demands of a busy office.
Thanks for taking the time to interview me, and explain the goals of your agency along with the dutys of this position. As I mentioned during the interview I am very interested in working for the Maraposa agency, and look forward to hearing from you about this position. In the event that you might possibly need additional information from me or facts about me, all you need to do is shoot me an e-mail at email@example.com.
Tracy A. Teslenko